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Fasasi S Community Member

Could you please help me out?

Could anyone here me review my profile?
https://www.upwork.com/freelancers/~01f8991e536b592ed1 

I will definitely appreciate any feedback!

Thank you!

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Anthony H Community Member

Fasasi,

Hi. Welcome. I think I can help.

 

Your write-up opens with this:

 

"Imagine this: your brand breaking through the noise, catching eyes, and turning heads. You're not just aiming for visibility; you want to be unforgettable. You're here because you know the power of social media and are ready to harness it to its fullest potential. I’m Fasasi, known as Bobronix across all social media platforms | Basketball enthusiast and hiking lover"

 

Now ask yourself, how much of that is useful information????

 

The answer is ... none. If you want work as a social media marketing manager, who cares if you like to go on hikes and play basketball?

 

The rest of that is very well written ... but how much of it is useful? Still ... none.

 

So, your profile doesn't start until you say, 

 

"I am a Social Media Marketing Expert with over 5 years of experience who is certified on HubSpot and Google and have managed ad budgets exceeding $300k.

 

That is useful information.

 

"I Worked with 100+ clients across various industries ...

 

That is useful to know ... BUT WHAT INDUSTRIES??????

 

Later on you say you are not here to make empty promises. Well, it sounds pretty empty if you don't tell us what industries you have worked on. If you don't provide details what you say will sound empty ... you have to give us details.

 

After that ... take hard information from your lists and write them into a paragraph or two WITHOUT USING LISTS.

 

So, instead of "High Quality Leads

                            "A Sales Surge,"

                             "Unstoppable brand recognition ..." 

Write that in a narrative form. And BE HONEST.

 

So, you would write something like "I have generated high quality leads for a variety of companies, including ______, _____, and ______. I hope to provide you with an impressive sales surge that increases your brand recognition..."

 

You wrote "unstoppable brand recognition." That's just what an empty promise sounds like. Unstoppable? Really? 

 

Bring it down to earth. It is more valuable if you explain what you can actually do than try to sound like you are on top of Mount Everest. Just be yourself.

It would be very, very, very impressive if you could increase someone's brand recognition. They don't expect unstoppable. They would be glad to pay you for a nice bump in their brand identity. They don't expect you to circle the globe or fly to the moon. Quit with the "unstoppable" nonsense. It sounds childish to me.

 

If you want to  be a professional, it starts now. Explain what you can do  ... convince people you are an expert at that and you and they will be happy. Don't try to convince people you are what you are not.

AND NO LISTS .... NONE. (Nobody reads them.)

 

Good luck.