Bill,
Boy, Bill, I hate to be beaten at my own game. But you clearly are two steps ahead of the pack.
I think your profile starts terrifically ... and you don't need help with that at all. Furthermore, it could be very effective. But I'll air out my concern, anyway. Food for thought.
Here's the trick (which you seem to know). Clients come to Uprwork to hire someone. That's why they are here. That's why they looked for us on Google. That's why they posted a job. That's why they are reading your profile.
What does this mean? It means you don't have to sell a thing. They came here to buy. If someone walked into your store on Main Street and said, "I've got cash and I'm ready to buy ..." don't you think advertising would be superfluous?
So .... you figured that out.
So .... someone is looking for a life coach / job seeking expert ... they might (operative word) want to read all those descriptions of your standard services.
And maybe not. My rule of thumb is do not pull the trigger too fast. People are skittish. You don't want to jump the gun.
I have told many people, "No curve balls until you get the client one on one."
The difference for you would be this: Scratch all those short process descriptions ... 1. Initial interview, 2. Resume, 3, More work on resume ...
Scratch all of that. In it's place, say "I have a detailed structure that takes care of this step by step and gets you from seeking to landing a great job...."
The profile isn't the place to close the deal and if you give them too much information without you in the room, you risk hanging yourself.
Now ... that's the standard advice. However, if I was looking for a job and I saw that detailed process all laid out, I might just be impressed. I would certainly know you weren't kidding around and that you had done this before. So, there are advantages and risks doing it your way. Do you follow?
Look ... you don't need a lick of help on the details of your writing or any of that. Your introductory video is very, very good. I listened to 15 seconds and figured out you knew what you were doing.
So, that's my bit. Maybe you should scratch out that list and replace it with a global statement (or two or three) that says you have a plan that is very effective. Less details at this point .. Or, you could give a truncated list. "We start with resume and work our way towards invterview skills ..."
That's my cautionary tale. You might be giving out too many details too soon. Straight out of Sales 101.
Or give it a month or two and see what happens.
Great work. Good luck to ya.
