Request for Feedback on My Profile

[#1]

Hi All,
I hope you're doing well. I’m currently working on enhancing my profile and would greatly appreciate your feedback. As someone with experience in this field, your input would be incredibly valuable in helping me improve.

Please feel free to share any suggestions you have regarding my skills, projects, or overall presentation.

Thank you in advance for taking the time!

https://www.upwork.com/freelancers/mubashirh59

Kind Regards:
Mubashir Hassan

[#2 · Accepted solution]

Mubashir,

1. Shorten your working title to three or four words if possible. "Expert Application Developer" would suffice.

2. Take out "Hi, I'm Mubashir, a seasoned mobile app developer" and write, "I am an expert mobile app developer with over nine years experience working across iOS and Android platforms."

There are simple reasons for this. First, it will get you more views and second it is better to be an expert than it is to be "seasoned."

3. Take out all the bold text and all the icons. This isn't a circus.

4. Don't say "proven track record." Instead, give actual details of your experience. "At _________ company I developed apps for games, retail websites and ....." 

The phrase "proven track record" is a not convincing without details that suggest you actually did what you claim you did.

6. Take out "I'm here to help bring your vision to life." Replace that with something more sincere and useful to your clients

If you have done this for nine years, you would know clients don't say "I need someone to bring my vision to life." What is it they say ... after nine years you should be much more sincere and accurate. Do they say,  "I need a website that works on many devices ..." If so, say that. Do they say, "I need a retail website that holds up to a lot of traffic..." If that's what they say, then say that. I don't know what they say, I'm not a developer. But I know they do not say, "I need someone to bring my vision to life."

If you have done this for nine years, you must have more insight into what your clients want than that.

7. Take out "I thrive on tackling complex problems." Replace that with something the clients want.

Why? Simple: Your clients don't care what you thrive on. They want to know that you understand what THEY thrive on. Don't say "It makes me happy to do this ..." instead say, "I know what makes you happy and I can help you with that."

8, Shorten your lists and lengthen your narrative. Nobody reads lists. If you want them, fine ... but nobody reads them, so you're wasting your time.

Good luck.