Is my Cover letter draft okay for a proposal?

[opeyemiali]

Hello,

I,m Opeyemi, kindly look into my proposal draft.
I've attached below the draft or my proposal for review, I will be most glad if errors present are highlighted and possible corrections can be mentioned.

I'll appreciate your quick response.
Thank you so much.

**Edited for Community Guidelines**

[prestonhunter]

You are not supposed to have a cover letter draft.

As a client, I don't want to see that.

Every cover letter should be different for each job proposal.

A cover letter should never be about the freelancer.

As a client, when I post a job, I want your cover letter to be about three things:

Me

My project

How you are going to make my life better by working on my project 

[opeyemiali]

Thank you very much, I sure get all what MUST BE in a proposal.

(1) About the client.

(2) I need to hammer (talk) about the project.

(3) What and how to make the client's bussiness/products come
outstandingly successful.

Thank you for your help, I will sure send it to the community for you to
access when I'm through.

Pardon my mistakes, a starter must surely have series of errors to make it
to perfection.

I thank all the community for being there when I'm trying to make history,
you all are part of the 'genesis'.

Once again thank you Upwork team!

Thank you, Community!

Still me,

Opeyemi Ali.